My Great Mistake (a Poem)

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Great Mistake
by Kieran
Here I sit and contemplate,
I’ve messed it up, a big mistake.
Sorrow and misery is my song,
Now choirs of seraphim sing along.

My life is ruined, I can’t go back,
Why can’t life just cut me slack?
Can’t help but think it’s all my fault
Stings like woulds, filled with salt.

I constantly mess up, always make mistakes,
Just make it stop for goodness sake!
Here I shiver, cry, and shake
If remorse is venom, I’m bit by the snake.

Nowhere to run, nowhere to hide,
Have no choice but watch it fly.
What did I? You my inquire.
I just hung another slider.

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@KierannosaurusK said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

Great Mistake
by Kieran
Here I sit and contemplate,
I’ve messed it up, a big mistake.
Sorrow and misery is my song,
Now choirs of seraphim sing along.

My life is ruined, I can’t go back,
Why can’t life just cut me slack?
Can’t help but think it’s all my fault
Stings like woulds, filled with salt.

I constantly mess up, always make mistakes,
Just make it stop for goodness sake!
Here I shiver, cry, and shake
If remorse is venom, I’m bit by the snake.

Nowhere to run, nowhere to hide,
Have no choice but watch it fly.
What did I? You my inquire.
I just hung another slider.

Hide and fly don't rhyme

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After reading the 2nd line, ....Zzzzzzz

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@squishiesgirl said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

@KierannosaurusK said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

Great Mistake
by Kieran
Here I sit and contemplate,
I’ve messed it up, a big mistake.
Sorrow and misery is my song,
Now choirs of seraphim sing along.

My life is ruined, I can’t go back,
Why can’t life just cut me slack?
Can’t help but think it’s all my fault
Stings like woulds, filled with salt.

I constantly mess up, always make mistakes,
Just make it stop for goodness sake!
Here I shiver, cry, and shake
If remorse is venom, I’m bit by the snake.

Nowhere to run, nowhere to hide,
Have no choice but watch it fly.
What did I? You my inquire.
I just hung another slider.

Hide and fly don't rhyme

Imperfect rhymes are used all the time in poetry.

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@DriveByTrucker17 said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

@squishiesgirl said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

@KierannosaurusK said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

Great Mistake
by Kieran
Here I sit and contemplate,
I’ve messed it up, a big mistake.
Sorrow and misery is my song,
Now choirs of seraphim sing along.

My life is ruined, I can’t go back,
Why can’t life just cut me slack?
Can’t help but think it’s all my fault
Stings like woulds, filled with salt.

I constantly mess up, always make mistakes,
Just make it stop for goodness sake!
Here I shiver, cry, and shake
If remorse is venom, I’m bit by the snake.

Nowhere to run, nowhere to hide,
Have no choice but watch it fly.
What did I? You my inquire.
I just hung another slider.

Hide and fly don't rhyme

Imperfect rhymes are used all the time in poetry.

Yeah but when everything else rhymes it is jarring

[DriveByTrucker17]

@squishiesgirl said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

@DriveByTrucker17 said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

@squishiesgirl said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

@KierannosaurusK said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

Great Mistake
by Kieran
Here I sit and contemplate,
I’ve messed it up, a big mistake.
Sorrow and misery is my song,
Now choirs of seraphim sing along.

My life is ruined, I can’t go back,
Why can’t life just cut me slack?
Can’t help but think it’s all my fault
Stings like woulds, filled with salt.

I constantly mess up, always make mistakes,
Just make it stop for goodness sake!
Here I shiver, cry, and shake
If remorse is venom, I’m bit by the snake.

Nowhere to run, nowhere to hide,
Have no choice but watch it fly.
What did I? You my inquire.
I just hung another slider.

Hide and fly don't rhyme

Imperfect rhymes are used all the time in poetry.

Yeah but when everything else rhymes it is jarring

It wouldn’t be as noticeable when spoken

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Roses are grey
Violets are grey
Everything's grey
because I am a dog

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@DriveByTrucker17 said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

@squishiesgirl said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

@DriveByTrucker17 said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

@squishiesgirl said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

@KierannosaurusK said in My Great Mistake (a Poem):

Great Mistake
by Kieran
Here I sit and contemplate,
I’ve messed it up, a big mistake.
Sorrow and misery is my song,
Now choirs of seraphim sing along.

My life is ruined, I can’t go back,
Why can’t life just cut me slack?
Can’t help but think it’s all my fault
Stings like woulds, filled with salt.

I constantly mess up, always make mistakes,
Just make it stop for goodness sake!
Here I shiver, cry, and shake
If remorse is venom, I’m bit by the snake.

Nowhere to run, nowhere to hide,
Have no choice but watch it fly.
What did I? You my inquire.
I just hung another slider.

Hide and fly don't rhyme

Imperfect rhymes are used all the time in poetry.

Yeah but when everything else rhymes it is jarring

It wouldn’t be as noticeable when spoken

True....was mostly just screwing with him...actually thought it was pretty good